This is a great article and interesting topic, but why must you mention a person's hair color and "distance runner's build" at all? What on earth does that have to do with anything? Focus on the topic at hand, not on the physical attributes of the subjects. It doesn't make any sense to the reader - what are we intended to glean from this information? It's superfluous when combined with photos of the subjects and when their physical descriptions have nothing to do with the information in the article.
Re: “Bitters Dispute: Federal Regs Force Changes at Urban Moonshine”
This is a great article and interesting topic, but why must you mention a person's hair color and "distance runner's build" at all? What on earth does that have to do with anything? Focus on the topic at hand, not on the physical attributes of the subjects. It doesn't make any sense to the reader - what are we intended to glean from this information? It's superfluous when combined with photos of the subjects and when their physical descriptions have nothing to do with the information in the article.